User blog comment:SayuriDarling/The Sword of Summer Official Discussion/@comment-10901795-20151101125050/@comment-8863386-20151101190058

The first few paragraphs about Uncle Rick's previous works could be summed up to just one whole paragraph. Try not using the word 'then' too much. Once is good enough. The ideas could be a bit more organized, and it needs more transitions from one idea to the next.

" Using modern religion ... discovering his father is a God...."

Capitalization of the word 'god' is like super important 'cause there's a lot of sensitive people out there. Anyways, it's a good review, you've got your own opinion and voice in there and just keep in mind the small details.

Oh, and the two different perspectives of Norse characters could be tweaked out a bit so it doesn't come off as a different idea to people from what you're trying to say.

I really hope this helps. Good luck on that review! Hope you get an A+!