User blog comment:Pbre/Book Idea (Young Writer)/@comment-173.61.33.169-20100127115424

hey dat sounds good i think u should write it in sum1 elses point of view like jake r cody it would be cool 2 c the story out of another persons perspective cuz it wudnt b as eksiting with percy teling it cuz now hes this awesom sword fighter now it wud be more like (cody 4 instinc) "And then a monster jumped out of the woods and attacked us. I had no clue what to do. I felt a tight feeling in my gut like the one my sword instructor Percy described. It pulled harder, and just when the creature pounced at me, a giant lightning bolt came out of the sky and zapped it!" rather then (percy) "Oh, and then another monster came out of the woods (as usual). I walked up to it, stabbed it with Riptide, and it turned to dust. Just like all the other monsters I've killed. He couldn't do any thing because I have Achilles Curse." Now doesn't the 1st 1 sound better I'm not insulting it it is very very good -Anonymous